Grandiose


Lady in the Water Fountain | Abreeza Mall, Davao City
I never felt a heartbeat
     Then you present yourself like a mystery
     Out of nowhere
You shed some light
     On my gloomy night
     From that point on
You promise to be there
     That we will face each day
     With love and faith
We took a vow
     And sealed it 
     With our heart entwined
I look up to the sky
     And I see your face
     Embracing God's greatest creation
Facing the sun
     Doing an oblation
     Praying from this day on
I will love you
     Till the last strand of my crowning glory
     Fall on me

- Xander

Comments

  1. Luneta Park? lol.

    Naks tol. Inlabidabidab? XD

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  2. Belib talaga ako sa mga magagaling gumawa ng tula :) Magaling

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  3. ganda sarap basahin nice one xander

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  4. Kilig ako sa poem..hopefully I get to write something like this for someone too!

    Lovely picture, though the name Lady in the Water makes me think may white lady na biglang lilitaw!

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    1. Hahaha ikaw naman tinatakot mo sarili mo...wala nang nakakatakot sa blog ko.. wahahaha.. promise...

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  5. astig ang mga lines... mukhang may pinaghugutan....

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  6. I liked how it started as a fleeting and ephemeral description of a stranger and ballooned into an impassioned declaration. The allusion to the great Oblation was a nice touch. My only problem is, the POV changes from night to day. That kind of dampened the poem for me. But all in all it was a sweet and charming ride.

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  7. I liked how it started as a fleeting and ephemeral description of a stranger and ballooned into an impassioned declaration. The allusion to the great Oblation was a nice touch. My only problem is, the POV changes from night to day. That kind of dampened the poem for me. But all in all it was a sweet and charming ride.

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    1. Hi Iris, wow i never thought you would visit my blog. Thank you for the comment on this poem. I really appreciate it. Im learning a lot from your comment. Thank you so very much. Really appreciate it.

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  8. I liked how it started as a fleeting and ephemeral description of a stranger and ballooned into an impassioned declaration. The allusion to the great Oblation was a nice touch. My only problem is, the POV changes from night to day. That kind of dampened the poem for me. But all in all it was a sweet and charming ride.

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    1. I really appreciate your comment... I edited a few on my poem. Appreciate it a lot. Thanks.

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  9. I liked how it started as a fleeting and ephemeral description of a stranger and ballooned into an impassioned declaration. The allusion to the great Oblation was a nice touch. My only problem is, the POV changes from night to day. That kind of dampened the poem for me. But all in all it was a sweet and charming ride.

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  10. ang ganda ng fountain, pak na pak din sa mga salitang iyong nilathala :D

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